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Quote:Well, expect for Starr, who was sitting in a chair and eating popcorn while watching everyone else.
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At that moment, Hardy pulled the chair from under Starr, which caused her to collapse onto the ground beneath her.
“What the crap was that for?!” Starr exclaimed, glaring at Hardy.
EPIC WIN

Can't wait for the next chapter. These are my favorite parts of the chapter. Now I'm confused who "Light" is.
this is totally OWNAGE!!! Giga, you've outdont yourself. I think you should have kept me in here though. And I never really knew who Omega was. Pity :/

Anyways, nice chapter. But you really have to work up a schedule, because this chapter took too long XD
Hardy-Junpei Wrote:Now I'm confused who "Light" is.

Light is the member Light the NE0N G0D, a member that I convinced to join the forum. He's a friend of mine from school.
Thank you all for your comments.

Unfortunately, there won't be a chapter of that lenght for a while. So, expect chapters of usual length.

In the meantime, in an attempt to turn the fic into a collaborative one amognst the Organization, I had Ziggy, Kudamon, Der Hakmeister, She's a Witch!, and Pookiesnook write te next 5 Chapters (although only 3 of them actually tried).


First off is Chapter 20, one assigned to Ziggy.

This is the original version of it.
Warning: Your eyes will probably explode.
Spoiler:
"There's my next target..." said Zadon, as he came to Belmopan.

Zadon came to Belmopan. "This is easy... too easy." An evil grin crossed his face, "I shall go by an alias, and gather strength to do my ultimate goldenization attack..."
Then, he noticed a figure running on the horizon. "Damn! I've been followed!" Zadon muttered. "This is a good of a time as any..."

Craz-E came to the city of Belmopan a few minutes later. "Heh... I made it..." he wheezed, "Now, why did I come... here? Maybe he knows." He said, seeing a person.

What? It's Craz-E..? thought Zadon, Well, this will be interesting...
"Hello," said Craz-E, "I am... er... Who?"
"Who?" asked Zadon cautiously.
"Wait! My name is Laz-E! No... that isn't right..." he said.
"Uh... huh..." said Zadon. Man, did he forget his name again?
"Hm... Dais-E? No... Haz-E? Nope... OH, I KNOW! My name is Craz-E!" he became ecstatic when he remembered his name.
"Drazy?" asked Zadon, feigning deafness, "Your Dane is Drazy?"
"NO, NO!" exclaimed Craz-E, "My NAME is CRAZ-E!"
"No need to shout, Brazy!" said Zadon, restraining a laugh, "Now, what do you want?"
"AGH! Oh, er..." Craz-E began.
"You want oars?" Zadon asked.
"No. Aw, blast it! I forgot what I wanted!"
"You want fast zits that abott Tut I. Wan said? What the hell does that mean?"
"I remember!"
"What about December?"
"Have you seen a guy that's glowing gold?" Craz-E asked loudly.
"Oh, why didn't you say that in the first place? He flew to the East." Zadon pointed to the Caribbean.
"W-What?!" exclaimed Craz-E incredulously, "I now HATE that guy... he made pinchy cry!"
"What?" asked Zadon.
"Nothing..." replied Craz-E, "What's your name?"
Zadon looked around, "Yes, the weather's the same."
"WHAT IS YOUR NAME?"
"I'm not deaf, you dolt!" said Zadon, "And my name is... Floppy."
"Floppy?" said Craz-E, "and I thought I had a weird name." Craz-E then jumped in the water and swam to the east.

Floppy... I like that... thought Zadon, no one would ever suspect me of taking over this place... He then went towards a nearby power plant.

When he got there, he thought screw this disguise, I'll just take the power plant's energy.
He jumped onto the wires, and started stealing the electricity.

Two hours later, he jumped down, fully charged. "IT'S TIME!" he shouted, then put his hand to the ground. The ground turned gold, then it spread, very quickly. A fly that was buzzing around, fell to the ground with a clank. Then, everything above ground, after turning gold, melted into the earth. When Zadon stood up, he stood apon a huge, 20 mile radius, circle of pure 25 carat gold, as is everything he goldenized. As he walked around, he heard a voice in his head.
"Connection established......"

This is what happened when I tweaked it.
Spoiler:
Early into the morning, Zadon walked out of a wrecked shack in Belize.
"Man that was one crazy earthquake yesterday," he groaned. "I wonder how bad it was."
He activated his watch to check the news. To his surprise, he found reports of an earthquake not only in Belize, but all over the world.
“What the....” he gasped. “Is that even possible?”
He checked through other reports, only to get the same result.
“A worldwide earthquake,” he responded. “But this is completely unnatural. What could have caused something like this?”
He then sighed, and then deactivated his watch.
“Oh well, I’ll worry about it later.”
He then walked away from the shack, which collapsed as he left it. Then, he leapt into the air and flew towards his next destination.

"There's my next target..." said Zadon, as he came to Belmopan hours later.
He looked at the city below him, and noticed the poor condition of the city. Buildings had been knocked onto the ground. There were five cracks in the earth running through the city.
“These poor fools,” he chuckled to himself. “It’s hard to decide whether or not I should let them live when I turn this entire city into gold.”

Two hours later, he jumped down onto the ground, catching the attention of the citizens in the city.
“Well, I feel bad for these people, but…” he sighed.
He raised a hand, which emitted a gold aura.
“IT'S TIME!” he shouted, then put his hand to the ground.
The ground turned gold, and then it spread, very quickly. A fly that was buzzing around, fell to the ground with a clank. Then, everything above ground, after turning gold, melted into the earth.

Well, almost everything. As Craz-E was walking into Belmopan, he noticed the ground below him turning gold. Thinking quickly, he jumped outside of the radius of the goldenization.
“Whew, that was close,” he sighed.
His expression of relief quickly turned into one of astonishment as he watched the goldenized city melt into the earth.
“Umm….” he responded. “How is that even possible?”
Taking his mind off that for a moment, he reached into his pocket and pulled out a small pouch.
“I might as well sample some of this gold,” he muttered to himself.
At that instant, he tossed his pouch away as he was engulfed in a pillar of light that turned him into gold. The golden body fell onto the ground, and melted into the earth.
The pouch, which had been thrown quickly enough to be turned to gold, fell onto the ground away from the radius of golden earth. From it crawled another Craz-E.
“Man, this thing needs to be bigger in case of these situations,” he groaned as he struggled to get out of the pouch. “At least this void is useful for something.”
When he finally got out of the pouch, he reached into it and pulled out a pencil and a notepad.
Onto it, he wrote, “Note to self: go back to the city to gather information on this plot of world domination.”
He then reached into the pouch and pulled out a cheeseburger.
“But first,” he responded, “to eat this cheeseburger, as I am really hungry.”

When Zadon stood up, he stood upon a huge, 20 mile radius, circle of pure 25 carat gold, as is everything he goldenized.
“This is becoming too easy,” he sighed. “I need a challenge.”
As he walked around, he heard a voice in his head.
“Connection established......”


Expect Flashback Chapter 4 soon.
One thing...
Quote:"There's my next target..." said Zadon, as he came to Belmopan hours later.
He looked at the city below him, and noticed the poor condition of the city. Buildings had been knocked onto the ground. There were five cracks in the earth running through the city.
“These poor fools,” he chuckled to himself. “It’s hard to decide whether or not I should let them live when I turn this entire city into gold.”
Quote:The ground turned gold, and then it spread, very quickly. A fly that was buzzing around, fell to the ground with a clank. Then, everything above ground, after turning gold, melted into the earth.
“These poor fools,” he chuckled to himself. “It’s hard to decide whether or not I should let them live when I turn this entire city into gold.”
Er...

Anyway, good work to Ziggy... sorta... and good work to Giga for fixing it. XD
(09-04-2010 12:41 AM)Kudamon Wrote: [ -> ]One thing...
Quote:"There's my next target..." said Zadon, as he came to Belmopan hours later.
He looked at the city below him, and noticed the poor condition of the city. Buildings had been knocked onto the ground. There were five cracks in the earth running through the city.
“These poor fools,” he chuckled to himself. “It’s hard to decide whether or not I should let them live when I turn this entire city into gold.”
Quote:The ground turned gold, and then it spread, very quickly. A fly that was buzzing around, fell to the ground with a clank. Then, everything above ground, after turning gold, melted into the earth.
“These poor fools,” he chuckled to himself. “It’s hard to decide whether or not I should let them live when I turn this entire city into gold.”
Er...

Anyway, good work to Ziggy... sorta... and good work to Giga for fixing it. XD
:facepalm: Stupid errors!

Anyways, I'll fix that.
In the meantime, expect Flashback Chapter on Sunday, along with the next chapter.
Wow.. this is just... AWESOME!!!

I still can't figure out who that crazE guy is >_<

Anyways, I loved this. Although I loved how I was in the first one you made, I have to say I liked myself better in the second one. Great job giga =D
Normally I'd post the Flashback Chapter at this point, but I decided to break my trend this time around.

Chapter 21 was assigned to Kudamon.

His Version
Spoiler:
“Are we there yet?”
“Shut up! Just, please, SHUT UP!”
Thus was the conversation between Kudamon and Ziebart’s clone as they neared Caracas, Venezuela.
“I still say that name sounds weird for a city,” Ziebart’s clone muttered.
“Don’t break the fourth wall, Zieb,” Kudamon snapped as Grovyle followed closely behind him.
Ziebart continued to mutter to himself. Kudamon sighed, then glanced at Grovyle with a wry smirk. Grovyle nodded, then took a brick from a bag he was carrying. He threw it in the air, so as Ziebart kept running, it hit him on the head.
“Ow!” Ziebart groaned. He stumbled and tripped. Kudamon was considering leaving him there when a shadow passed overhead.
Grovyle raised his claws, ready to fight off the shadow, while Kudamon drew his swords. The shadow made a u-turn, then a midnight blue dragon landed on Ziebart and began to eat him. Ziebart screamed, but oddly enough Kudamon and Grovyle relaxed.
“Deathstorm, stop eating my clones!” Another clone of Ziebart’s came out of the trees.
Deathstorm favored him with a slightly amused glance as he finished eating. “You have enough to spare. Besides, I’m hungry.”
Ziebart groaned.

The foursome- Deathstorm refused to leave on the grounds that he might get hungry again, much to Ziebart’s displeasure- finally reached Caracas. The city was bustling with activity, and the people seemed to not even notice the dragon among them.
Although there was one man who ran up to them.
“¡Por favor déme el cereal!” He said, holding out a bowl to them.
“What?” Kudamon asked. “I can’t understand you!”
Albeit half-completed, he actual put more thought into it than Ziggy did (no offense).

The Completed Version (aka My Version)
Spoiler:
“Are we there yet?”
“Shut up! Just, please, SHUT UP!”
Thus was the conversation between Kudamon and Ziebart’s clone as they neared Caracas, Venezuela.
“I still say that name sounds weird for a city,” Ziebart’s clone muttered.
“Don’t break the fourth wall, Zieb,” Kudamon snapped as Grovyle followed closely behind him.
Ziebart continued to mutter to himself. Kudamon sighed, and then glanced at Grovyle with a wry smirk. Grovyle nodded, and then took a brick from a bag he was carrying. He threw it in the air, so as Ziebart kept running, it hit him on the head.
“Ow!” Ziebart groaned. He stumbled and tripped. Kudamon was considering leaving him there when a shadow passed overhead.
Grovyle raised his claws, ready to fight off the shadow, while Kudamon drew his swords. The shadow made a u-turn, and then a midnight blue dragon landed on Ziebart and began to eat him. Ziebart screamed, but oddly enough Kudamon and Grovyle relaxed.
“Deathstorm, stop eating my clones!” Another clone of Ziebart’s came out of the trees.
Deathstorm favored him with a slightly amused glance as he finished eating. “You have enough to spare. Besides, I’m hungry.”
Ziebart groaned.
“Can we just go?” Kudamon groaned.
“And where's today's destination?” Deathstorm asked.
"Read the story," Ziebart answered.
"You have any more bricks, Grovyle?" Kudamon asked with a smirk on his face.

The foursome- Deathstorm refused to leave on the grounds that he might get hungry again, much to Ziebart’s displeasure- finally reached Caracas. The city was bustling with activity, and the people seemed to not even notice the dragon among them.
Although there was one man who ran up to them.
“¡Por favor déme el cereal!” He said, holding out a bowl to them.
“What?” Kudamon asked. “I can’t understand you!”
"I think he's asking for cereal," Deathstorm replied, raising an eyebrow.
"Oh," Kudamon responded. “Well, in that case....”
He turned towards the man, and yelled, “NO!!!!!!!”
At that moment, people turned around and noticed not only Kudamon shouting at the man, but the Ziebart clone, Grovyle and Deathstorm standing with him. They began to panic in Spanish, which began to get on Kudamon’s nerves.
“Ugh, I can’t take this anymore,” he groaned, holding his head.
“Let’s just take over this place before these people make Kudamon’s brain explode,” Deathstorm growled.
“Good idea,” Ziebart agreed, nervously staring at Kudamon, whose rage was steadily increasing.
“These people, they’re…”
“Oh god,” Deathstorm responded, backing away from Kudamon.”
“They’re….. They’re….”
“Hit the decks!” Ziebart exclaimed.
“They’re driving me crazy!!”
At that moment, Kudamon extended both of his hands westward into the city, and shot a blast of telekinetic energy that demolished the buildings in its path.
“Whoa….” Deathstorm gasped with an astonished expression on his face. He was so astonished, it caused him to open two eyelids placed over his usual pair of eyes.
Ziebart and Grovyle stared at Kudamon in awe, and fear.
The panicking people paused when they saw the destruction Kudamon caused.
“Now, take us to your leader!”

The four of them followed a group of Venezuelan soldiers into the central section of the capital to meet up with the leader. Kudamon was looking at various news reports he searched for on his watch.
"That reminds me," Kudamon suddenly said, "what could have possibly caused yesterday's earthquake?"
"Who knows?" Ziebart shrugged.
"Weird, because this morning, I checked the news," Kudamon continued. "Apparently this earthquake was worldwide."
"Worldwide?" Deathstorm responded. "That's crazy, considering there has never been a worldwide earthquake.
"I know. It doesn't make any-"
Kudamon instantly stopped to an eerie voice saying, "Connection established....."
Those who've been to Ustream on a regular basis should easily recognize Deathstorm.

Oh, and I'd also like to give Starr credit for telling us how to say "Please give me cereal!" in Spanish. That really helped. =D


Like stated earlier, expect the Flashback Chapter tomorrow, and (hopefully) Chapter 22.
This is just awesome! I loved how your version turned out, although I don't much understand where the "connection established" thing is coming from. I originally thought Ziggy was saying it, and he suddenly to a super-fast flight from his new melting El Dorado to Caracas to make a super quick city domination. But then I had to rethink that, because that's just ridiculous. Only Chuck Norris can do that.

But all in all, it was totally awesome. Kuda, I never knew you took "Brainstorm" to that kind of level O_o
Only Giga knows what the 'connection established' thing means, CrazE. He's keeping it a secret until he decides to tell us.

I liked this Chapter. The Spanish in there is just awesome :P

PS: I'm noticing a lot of cereal in this fic. Hmmm....
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