11-07-2010, 08:56 PM
lol, Alakatraz. Good chapter. And when are you gonna introduce a new character? It doesn't need to be mine, just a new character would be nice. And I agree with Char. It was a bit Star Warsy.
11-07-2010, 08:56 PM
11-07-2010, 09:13 PM
Star Wars is cool.
"No I spilled the pudding!" screamed Mr. Mime.
OMG SAVE THE PUDDING
Anyway, love the chapter, can't wait for the next~
"No I spilled the pudding!" screamed Mr. Mime.
OMG SAVE THE PUDDING
Anyway, love the chapter, can't wait for the next~
12-07-2010, 12:29 AM
While I was away I read a lot of manga and fan fics so that is why I have gotten much better.
12-07-2010, 02:27 AM
This was a great chapter, Fallen. I'm liking 80-D better now, so good job with that. Ading a mr. Mime butler serving pudding was a great touch, and Star Wars is awesome, so good. And Alakatraz is the most epic name for a prison. great job, and I cannot wait for the next chapter.
12-07-2010, 05:08 AM
Guess what?! Another Flashback chapter. I haven't posted one in a while. This one explains a new student transferring to Ridgeway High.
Flashback Chapter 2-Welcome to Ridgeway
Wow Soul seems like a BADASS!
You will find out more in the next FB!
Flashback Chapter 2-Welcome to Ridgeway
Spoiler:
It was just your average, plain old day. The same thing happens everyday. We wake up, go to school, hang out with friends after school, do our homework, and go to sleep. The cycle repeats and repeats. The everyday is a new day thing is a total lie. Well that's what the kids in class 1-B at Ridgeway High thought until that one faithful day.
It was a normal morning in class 1-B. Some teens were hanging out in the classroom or in the hallway. They were talking and laughing with their friends. Class was about to begin soon. Something was coming to their class. None of them knew what it was. Once class started they will find out. The door to the classroom opened and a red-haired boy walked through. He was wearing a red shirt that said, "Got Skill?" Behind was a short, black-haired boy with square glasses. The two of them walk to their seats. When the red-haired boy sits down he takes out his Nintendo DS. The black-haired boy also took out his DS.
"So what are you raising now, Blaze?" asked the black-haired boy.
"I am trying to hatch an egg," replied Blaze. He jumps out of his seat and makes a weird noise. "Hiro the egg his hatching!"
"It is?!" shouted Hiro. He gets out of his seat and stands next to Blaze.
The egg is shaking back and forth. Cracks start to appear on the egg then the egg cracks open. A white light in the form of a small creature appears from the egg. When the light vanishes it is a small, yellow mouse-like creature.
"Oh it's a Pichu," sighed Blaze.
"Why did you hatch a Pichu egg?" asked Hiro.
Blaze just stares at his DS. "I really don't know," replied Blaze.
The door opens again and a tall man in a suit with glasses walks in. A bell-like sound is heard through out the school.
"Pleas take your seats students," said the man. "Class is about to begin."
The students in the classroom took their seats. Even though they were seated they were still talking to each other. The man's name was written on the top-left corner of the board. It appeared to be their for a while. His name was Mr. Nishimura.
"Okay class I have an important announcement," announced Mr. Nishimura.
The class stopped talking immediately. They knew something was up. They never got announcements that were important. That was not a part of their normal everyday routine.
"We will be having a new student starting today," stated Mr. Nishimura.
All of the students were suprised to hear that they have a new student. The class was soon filled with voices.
"Is it a boy or a girl?"
"I hope she is a cute girl."
"No it has to be a strong, mysterious guy."
"I spilled my pudding on my pants!"
"I hope the new kid isn't as creepy as that on kid with the platypus with a mustache."
"What if their a sports jockey or a computer geek."
"Settle down class," said the Mr. Nishimura. He looked at his watch. "That is odd. The new student is supposed to be here by now."
Looks like the new kid isn't here yet. thought Blaze. He then hears voices coming from outside of the school. What's that noise.
He gets out of seat and walks to the window. In front of the school building is four people. Three of them are surronding one of them. The one that is getting surronded has raven hair and a black jacket with a white shirt underneath. He looked at the men around him.
"Oi Teach!" shouted Blaze. "There is a fight outside!"
After Blaze shouted the whole class ran towards the window. Some students ran to the other classrooms and told them the news. Soon the whole school were watching the fight. The three men were closing in on the boy.
"Aren't you gonna say sorry for bumping into me punk!?" asked man-1.
The boy was just leaning on the wall ignoring them.
"Hey did you hear me!"
The man grabbed the boy by his shirt and lifted him up. The boy finally looked at the man.
"Now you know I'm here! You better say sor..."
The boy sucker punched the man. The man flew backwards into his comrade. The other man ran up to the boy.
"You freakin bastard!" screamed the man-2.
The man grabbed a tree branch and ripped it off. He swung it at the boy. The boy dodged the swing and kneed the guy's chin. He then looked at the school because he heard cheering from the students. As the boy was staring at the school he didn't notice some cars park in front of the school. Friends of the knocked out men had came.
"Damn it!" shouted Blaze. "He doesn't even notice the cars behind him!"
"It's okay Blaze," said Hiro. "I am sure he will be fine."
"Screw this!" screamed Blaze.
Blaze turned around and rushed for the door. Some of his classmates saw him leave, but none of them tried to stop him. Blaze was about to leave until he felt a pull on his shirt. He turned around and saw a red-haired girl. She was wearing a black long-sleeved shirt and a red mini-skirt.
"Please be careful," said the girl.
"Don't worry Maya," replied Blaze.
Maya let go of Blaze and he ran through the door. He was determined to save the boy. The boy looked at the school building.
"Great," sighed the boy. "I am going to be late on my first day." He looked at a phone on the ground. "It looks like I dropped my phone.
The boy picked up the phone and looked at it. Behind the boy was a big man holding a metal pipe. The man was about to swing the pipe on the boy's head until...
"Oi!" screamed someone.
The boy, the man, and everyone in the school looked at the the school's main doors. A red-haired boy was running to the man. The boy jumped up and kicked the man right in the face. The man flew backwards with blood dripping down his face.
"Blaze!" screamed Hiro.
"So your name is Blaze," said the boy. "Thanks for saving my ass."
"Don't mention it," replied Blaze. "By the way. What is you name, dude?"
"The name's Soul. I just transferred here."
"So your the new student in my class."
"What a touchy moment," said an unknown voice.
Soul and Blaze turned around and they saw a huge mob of people. They were all holding bats, pipes, and other objects. The man in front of all them had a black business suit and a cigar in his mouth. The man takes the cigar out of his mouth.
"I just saw you punks take out some of my members," said the man. "I am not happy with that."
"So what old man!" shouted Soul.
"Hey Soul," whispered Blaze. "I don't think we should mess with them. There are a lot of them and two of us."
"These guys are nothing," said Soul. "I bet I could take them out with my eyes closed."
"That's it!" screamed the man. "Get them!"
The army of gang members charged the two teenagers.
"I hate you," said Blaze. He gave Soul an I-hate-you-for-doing-this-to-me look.
"Get ready!" shouted Soul.
As the army got near them they attacked. Soul kicked the nearest guy in the stomach and he coughed blood. He grabbed the guy's bat and started hitting people. Blaze just punched any enemy he sees in the gut. A huge man with a crowbar started to attack Blaze. Blaze dodged it and it looked he was dancing. Blaze then jumped in the air and kicked the huge man in the face. The man fell backwards and crushed a couple of guys. Some more cars arrived and more gang members appeared. Soul and Blaze were getting tired. Someone punched Blaze in the stomach and he was sent flying.
"Blaze!" screamed Soul. He turned around and a man hit him in the stomach with a bat. Soul literally flew and landed right next to Blaze. He was coughing out blood and his nose was bleeding.
The mob of gang members made a pathway in the middle of the crowd. Their boss was walking to Soul and Blaze.
"It looks like you boys lost," said the man. "Okay boys finish them!"
The gang members just stood their watching their boss.
"What are you waiting for?!" asked the man.
"Boss," said a member. "Their are just kids."
"Fine then!" shouted the man. He grabbed a bat and walked towards Soul. "I'll do it myself!"
The man put his foot on top of Soul's stomach. Soul coughed up more blood. The man brought up the bat and was about to swing, but something happened. Piles of paper were being thrown at him. The students of Ridgeway were defending their fellow classmates.
"What the hell?!" screamed the man.
Soul picked up the bat that was next to him. He got up from the ground and swung the bat at the man. The man got knocked out at the impact. Soon after the police showed up and arrested the gang members. The students were cheering for Soul and Blaze. After getting checked-up the two of them walked to the front door of the school.
"Oh yea I forgot to tell you something," said Blaze.
"What is it?" asked Soul.
"Welcome to Ridgeway!" replied Blaze.
It was a normal morning in class 1-B. Some teens were hanging out in the classroom or in the hallway. They were talking and laughing with their friends. Class was about to begin soon. Something was coming to their class. None of them knew what it was. Once class started they will find out. The door to the classroom opened and a red-haired boy walked through. He was wearing a red shirt that said, "Got Skill?" Behind was a short, black-haired boy with square glasses. The two of them walk to their seats. When the red-haired boy sits down he takes out his Nintendo DS. The black-haired boy also took out his DS.
"So what are you raising now, Blaze?" asked the black-haired boy.
"I am trying to hatch an egg," replied Blaze. He jumps out of his seat and makes a weird noise. "Hiro the egg his hatching!"
"It is?!" shouted Hiro. He gets out of his seat and stands next to Blaze.
The egg is shaking back and forth. Cracks start to appear on the egg then the egg cracks open. A white light in the form of a small creature appears from the egg. When the light vanishes it is a small, yellow mouse-like creature.
"Oh it's a Pichu," sighed Blaze.
"Why did you hatch a Pichu egg?" asked Hiro.
Blaze just stares at his DS. "I really don't know," replied Blaze.
The door opens again and a tall man in a suit with glasses walks in. A bell-like sound is heard through out the school.
"Pleas take your seats students," said the man. "Class is about to begin."
The students in the classroom took their seats. Even though they were seated they were still talking to each other. The man's name was written on the top-left corner of the board. It appeared to be their for a while. His name was Mr. Nishimura.
"Okay class I have an important announcement," announced Mr. Nishimura.
The class stopped talking immediately. They knew something was up. They never got announcements that were important. That was not a part of their normal everyday routine.
"We will be having a new student starting today," stated Mr. Nishimura.
All of the students were suprised to hear that they have a new student. The class was soon filled with voices.
"Is it a boy or a girl?"
"I hope she is a cute girl."
"No it has to be a strong, mysterious guy."
"I spilled my pudding on my pants!"
"I hope the new kid isn't as creepy as that on kid with the platypus with a mustache."
"What if their a sports jockey or a computer geek."
"Settle down class," said the Mr. Nishimura. He looked at his watch. "That is odd. The new student is supposed to be here by now."
Looks like the new kid isn't here yet. thought Blaze. He then hears voices coming from outside of the school. What's that noise.
He gets out of seat and walks to the window. In front of the school building is four people. Three of them are surronding one of them. The one that is getting surronded has raven hair and a black jacket with a white shirt underneath. He looked at the men around him.
"Oi Teach!" shouted Blaze. "There is a fight outside!"
After Blaze shouted the whole class ran towards the window. Some students ran to the other classrooms and told them the news. Soon the whole school were watching the fight. The three men were closing in on the boy.
"Aren't you gonna say sorry for bumping into me punk!?" asked man-1.
The boy was just leaning on the wall ignoring them.
"Hey did you hear me!"
The man grabbed the boy by his shirt and lifted him up. The boy finally looked at the man.
"Now you know I'm here! You better say sor..."
The boy sucker punched the man. The man flew backwards into his comrade. The other man ran up to the boy.
"You freakin bastard!" screamed the man-2.
The man grabbed a tree branch and ripped it off. He swung it at the boy. The boy dodged the swing and kneed the guy's chin. He then looked at the school because he heard cheering from the students. As the boy was staring at the school he didn't notice some cars park in front of the school. Friends of the knocked out men had came.
"Damn it!" shouted Blaze. "He doesn't even notice the cars behind him!"
"It's okay Blaze," said Hiro. "I am sure he will be fine."
"Screw this!" screamed Blaze.
Blaze turned around and rushed for the door. Some of his classmates saw him leave, but none of them tried to stop him. Blaze was about to leave until he felt a pull on his shirt. He turned around and saw a red-haired girl. She was wearing a black long-sleeved shirt and a red mini-skirt.
"Please be careful," said the girl.
"Don't worry Maya," replied Blaze.
Maya let go of Blaze and he ran through the door. He was determined to save the boy. The boy looked at the school building.
"Great," sighed the boy. "I am going to be late on my first day." He looked at a phone on the ground. "It looks like I dropped my phone.
The boy picked up the phone and looked at it. Behind the boy was a big man holding a metal pipe. The man was about to swing the pipe on the boy's head until...
"Oi!" screamed someone.
The boy, the man, and everyone in the school looked at the the school's main doors. A red-haired boy was running to the man. The boy jumped up and kicked the man right in the face. The man flew backwards with blood dripping down his face.
"Blaze!" screamed Hiro.
"So your name is Blaze," said the boy. "Thanks for saving my ass."
"Don't mention it," replied Blaze. "By the way. What is you name, dude?"
"The name's Soul. I just transferred here."
"So your the new student in my class."
"What a touchy moment," said an unknown voice.
Soul and Blaze turned around and they saw a huge mob of people. They were all holding bats, pipes, and other objects. The man in front of all them had a black business suit and a cigar in his mouth. The man takes the cigar out of his mouth.
"I just saw you punks take out some of my members," said the man. "I am not happy with that."
"So what old man!" shouted Soul.
"Hey Soul," whispered Blaze. "I don't think we should mess with them. There are a lot of them and two of us."
"These guys are nothing," said Soul. "I bet I could take them out with my eyes closed."
"That's it!" screamed the man. "Get them!"
The army of gang members charged the two teenagers.
"I hate you," said Blaze. He gave Soul an I-hate-you-for-doing-this-to-me look.
"Get ready!" shouted Soul.
As the army got near them they attacked. Soul kicked the nearest guy in the stomach and he coughed blood. He grabbed the guy's bat and started hitting people. Blaze just punched any enemy he sees in the gut. A huge man with a crowbar started to attack Blaze. Blaze dodged it and it looked he was dancing. Blaze then jumped in the air and kicked the huge man in the face. The man fell backwards and crushed a couple of guys. Some more cars arrived and more gang members appeared. Soul and Blaze were getting tired. Someone punched Blaze in the stomach and he was sent flying.
"Blaze!" screamed Soul. He turned around and a man hit him in the stomach with a bat. Soul literally flew and landed right next to Blaze. He was coughing out blood and his nose was bleeding.
The mob of gang members made a pathway in the middle of the crowd. Their boss was walking to Soul and Blaze.
"It looks like you boys lost," said the man. "Okay boys finish them!"
The gang members just stood their watching their boss.
"What are you waiting for?!" asked the man.
"Boss," said a member. "Their are just kids."
"Fine then!" shouted the man. He grabbed a bat and walked towards Soul. "I'll do it myself!"
The man put his foot on top of Soul's stomach. Soul coughed up more blood. The man brought up the bat and was about to swing, but something happened. Piles of paper were being thrown at him. The students of Ridgeway were defending their fellow classmates.
"What the hell?!" screamed the man.
Soul picked up the bat that was next to him. He got up from the ground and swung the bat at the man. The man got knocked out at the impact. Soon after the police showed up and arrested the gang members. The students were cheering for Soul and Blaze. After getting checked-up the two of them walked to the front door of the school.
"Oh yea I forgot to tell you something," said Blaze.
"What is it?" asked Soul.
"Welcome to Ridgeway!" replied Blaze.
Wow Soul seems like a BADASS!
You will find out more in the next FB!
12-07-2010, 05:40 PM
Okay....
A bit melodramatic if you ask me, but good nonetheless. XD
"I spilled my pudding on my pants!"
I smell a new running joke. XD
A bit melodramatic if you ask me, but good nonetheless. XD
"I spilled my pudding on my pants!"
I smell a new running joke. XD
12-07-2010, 05:59 PM
What kind of sick, twisted town are these kids living in? O_o
Good job ThatFallingGuy. You've improved with your writing, but you need to work on your lack of commas =/ also, you used their instead of they're... I just scolded you for grammar... crap, my sister's grammar nazi-ness is eating me alive!
Good job ThatFallingGuy. You've improved with your writing, but you need to work on your lack of commas =/ also, you used their instead of they're... I just scolded you for grammar... crap, my sister's grammar nazi-ness is eating me alive!
12-07-2010, 11:30 PM
Well the world the kids are living in is the present year we are in.
But seriously Soul seems like a bad ass
But seriously Soul seems like a bad ass
15-07-2010, 11:53 PM
Here is the long waited Chapter 9. Before I post it I will show you the character so far and who owns them and I own a lot XD
This is it!
Chapter 9-Alakatraz
The next upcoming chapter will be mostly FLASHBACKS representing what happened before The Game. Also if any of you have your own team or will own your own team you could start a side-story, but you have to confirm with me first. You can make your own teammates, but Charquil can't because his team is already set. XD
Here is teams so far
Spoiler:
Soul-Me
Blaze-Me
Rose-Me
Hiro-Me
Darc-Me
Reyn/Sara/Samuel/other characters that aren't owned by everyone else-ME!
The Organization-Me
Adam-Charquil
Team Dragonfire-Me/Charquil
Maya-Me/Charquil
Hak-Hak
Jason-Kudamon
Narred/Darren-Pookiesnook
Arie-crazE
Horizon-Mclolcat
Snow-Smearowak
Blaze-Me
Rose-Me
Hiro-Me
Darc-Me
Reyn/Sara/Samuel/other characters that aren't owned by everyone else-ME!
The Organization-Me
Adam-Charquil
Team Dragonfire-Me/Charquil
Maya-Me/Charquil
Hak-Hak
Jason-Kudamon
Narred/Darren-Pookiesnook
Arie-crazE
Horizon-Mclolcat
Snow-Smearowak
This is it!
Chapter 9-Alakatraz
Spoiler:
After that day nothing was the same. A few days have passed since the incident. Soul, Adam, and Jason are still missing. 80-D never showed up at Ridgeway High. Blaze postponed his date till another Saturday. Rose also missed a couple days of school. None of them had played The Game since the incedent. Now only 5 students were left in the class. Nobody cared that no one showed up anymore. On the news it said that kids were disappearing from all over the World. At this moment Blaze was walking to school. He knew why the kids were disappearing. It was The Game that was doing this. Blaze finally reached the school.
"I wonder where they are at?" said Blaze in a sad tone. He walks to the school slowly. "Rose has been absent for a while."
As Blaze gets closer to the school a shadow appears behind him. It is a shadow of a man. The man walks closer to Blaze and puts his hand on his shoulder.
Blaze turns around and goes into a fighting stance, "Who are you?!"
"Well hello Blaze," greeted the man. "You may know me as 80-D, but you shouldn't call me that in the open. Call Argorok for now."
"80-D!?" shouted Blaze. "I mean Argorok. What are you doing here?"
"Didn't I tell you I would be stopping by," replied Argorok. "Well here I am."
"You idiot!" shouted Blaze. "You were supposed to be here days ago! Soul, Adam, and Jason are still missing! Rose won't even come to school now!"
The bell is heard from the school. Blaze doesn't move an inch at the sound.
"You should head to class already k..." insisted Argorok.
Blaze punched 80-D in the face. He was angry at him. 80-D' right eye was all bruised up from Blaze's punch. Blaze the turned and walked to the school. He didn't care anymore that he was going to be late. He finally made it to his class and opened the door.
"Ah Blaze you're here," greeted Mr. Nishimura. "Just take your seat. Nothing happened yet."
Blaze walked to his seat lost in his thought. He looked at his classmates. Including him only about four remained. He then saw that Rose came to school. The others in the class were Maya and this kid reading a book. After a couple hours of nothing the bell finally rings. Maya walks up to Blaze with Rose behind her.
"Hey Blaze," greeted Maya. "We are going to eat lunch on the roof. Want to come with us?" She then turned to the kid with the book. "You can come too."
Blaze walks to the door, "Come on slow pokes I don't have all day."
Maya and Rose run to Blaze and they go to the roof.
"Wait for me guys!" shouted the kid.
The sound of screams were echoed through out the building. Through a small crack in a wall a light could be seen. This light wasn't heart-warming or bright. It was dark as the heart of those in this Prison. This Prison was the most ruthless and savaging of them all. The name of the Prison was Alakatraz.
"I heard that we have some new arrivals," said Prisoner 1.
"New people!" screamed Prisoner 2. "Oh boy! I hope they like to play!"
"You better not do anything to scare them you two!" shouted Prisoner 3.
As the other Prisoners were talking three new Prisoners were walking to their new homes. The Prisoners were none other then Soul, Adam, and Jason. Since Soul's right arm has been burnt off he doesn't have a right arm anymore. Then they finally arrived in their new home. Besides them there was another Pokemon. The Pokemon was a Tentacool. I am not sure how, but he was surviving out of water and using his tentacles to walk.
"This is your new home," said the Guard. He pushes the three of them into the cell and locks it. "Welcome to Alakatraz."
Soul was in a lot of pain. He lost a lot of blood before. Adam helped him get up and placed him on a bed.
"Welcome to cell block 436," greeted the Tentacool. "My name is Hak, but you can call me Roy since we are going to be cellmates."
"My name is Jason," replied Jason. He got on his bunk and lay down on it. "The Pichu is Soul and the Charmander is Charquil. What are you in for?"
"Well it's a long story," said Hak. "and if I told you I would have to kill you!"
Adam gulps out loud, "Well when is lunch Roy?"
A loud screeching noise echoed through out the Prison.
"It is now Lunch time," said Hak.
Soul jumps out of the bed when he hears its lunch time. Once the cell opens he runs to the cafeteria at an extreme speed.
"What is wrong with that kid?" asked the guard.
"I would like to know that too," sighed Adam.
When they finally arrived at the cafeteria Soul was sitting by himself with a huge stack of empty plates. The other Prisoners were just staring at him. After the three cellmates got their food they sat by Soul.
"How is he still small even though he eats so much?" asked Adam.
"One of the world's biggest," said Jason. "I mean smallest mysteries."
After a couple minutes Soul was finally stuffed. He was about to get his 23rd serving, but four Pokemon joined them. The Pokemon in the front was a scizor. The Pokemon right next to it was a wynaut. Behind them were a Trapinch and a Sneasel.
"Great," sighed Hak. "It's you guys."
"Howdy Roy," greeted the Wynaut. "You got any pudding?"
The Scizor picked up the Wynaut, "Darren you have to stop doing that."
"But Narred."
Hak faces Soul, Adam, and Jason, "I think I should introduce them." He points at the group in front of them. "The Scizor is Narred and the Wynaut is Darren. Believe it or not thet are the same person."
"Is that even possible?" asked Adam.
"Split personality," replied Darren. He looks at Jason. "Hello Jason."
"No!" shouted Jason. "It was you!"
"You guys know each other," said Adam.
"Wait I think this guy goes to our school," stated Soul. "I think this is the crazy guy that follows Jason around."
"Okay?" said Hak. "Well getting back to me. The Trapinch is Horizon..."
"But you can call me Doug!" interrupted Horizon.
"And the Sneasel is Snow," said Hak. He looks at the group with a confused look. "Wasn't there another one of you guys? Oh yea! The Bidoof."
"Oh you mean him," replied Darren.
Darren started to poke Jason. After a while Jason got irritated and threw a brick at Darren's face.
"Brick'd!" shouted Narred. "If you mean Hiro he is in the cell doing something."
Soul literally spit out all of his pudding on Jason's face.
"Is this karma or something," sighed Jason.
"Did you say Hiro?!" asked Soul.
"Yea I know Hiro," replied Narred. "He is my cellmate."
"So your telling me that Hiro is in Alakatraz!"
"Yes we are," said Snow. "We don't know why, but as soon as all of us started some guys kidnapped us and we awakened in this place."
"I knew it," said Jason. He was wiping off all of the pudding on him. "So the Organization is behind this."
"He is correct," agreed Adam. "We have seen face to face what they can do. Look what they did to Soul's arm.
Soul shows them his arm. When they look at it they looked freaked out. Darren even threw up on Jason.
"This just isn't my day," sighed Jason. Jason threw another brick at Darren.
"I think Hiro could fix it," suggested Horizon. "He is good with building and repairing things."
"Then it's decided," said Soul. He stood up and walked to Snow and Horizon. "Take us to Hiro!"
"By us you mean," said Darren.
"He means all of us!" shouted Narred.
The group of eight walked back to Narred's cell. When they arrived the saw a Bidoof. The Bidoof was building something.
"He always gets caught up in his inventions," whispered Horizon.
"Hey Hiro!" shouted Darren. "Some people want a Pickle." Narred punched him in the head. "I mean they want to meet you." He then passes out.
The Bidoof gets up off the floor and turns around. He looks at the group. He stares at Soul with and odd expression on his face.
"Long time no see Hiro," greeted Soul.
"Soul!" cried Hiro. He tackled Soul to the ground. He was happy to see one of his old friends. Then he got off of Soul. "What are you doing here!?"
"Well we got captured by the Organization," replied Adam.
"They ambushed us and it became a full in Battle Royal," said Jason. "Well enough with the talk. We need you to repair Soul's arm."
Soul shows Hiro his "arm." Hiro jumps back when he sees what happened. He immediately jumps back to his work and starts to build something. After 10 minutes he was still working.
"And that's how I met this Dumbass," sighed Jason while pointing at Darren.
"So you really threw a brick at him," said Hak. "In real life?"
"He did," replied Narred. "Since I am technically Darren it hurt. It hurt a lot."
"Well when I first went Ridgeway I got ambushed by a bunch of Gang members," said Soul with a smirk. "Then Blaze came along and we beat them to a pulp."
"So you and Blaze actually defeated a gang" said Adam. "Well I live nearby your school so maybe I could meet some of you guys."
"It's finished!" screamed Hiro. He jumped up and down with excitement.
When he screamed everyone didn't expect it and one of them screamed. They all stared at each other and laughed. After the commotion Hiro attached the arm to Soul. Soul screamed a little because of the pain.
"Well their it is," said Hiro. "It still needs a few modifications, but I am not sure how I am going to do it."
"It should be about the time when they arrive," said Jason.
"Right as usual Jason," agreed Adam.
"I forgot about them," said Soul.
"Who?!" shouted the others.
"Our allies," replied Jason. "The Rebillion is coming to save us. There might even be a mass breakout."
Hak looked confused, "A mass bre.."
A loud explosion interrupted Hak. Sirens and screams were heard after the explosion. Prisoners were escaping and hell was breaking loose.
"What in the world was that?" asked Hak.
"Our escape!" shouted Soul. "You know what to do Jason."
Jason nodded at Soul. His leaf blades started to glow and he sliced the bars of the cell, but it failed.
"It didn't work!" screamed Jason. Smoke started to fill up the Prison.
"Maybe this will," said a voice. The smoke was covering his whole body. The only thing visible was the keys in his hand. He unlocked the doors to the cell.
As Soul walked out of the Prison he stood in front of the figure, "Who are you?"
"Sorry about that," said the figure. "80-D do your thing."
Soul, Adam, and Jason knew who it was now. The smoke blew away and a couple of Pokemon wee standing in front of them. Besides Blaze, Rose, and 80-D a few other Pokemon were there. An Aipom, eevee, and a Kecleon were with them.
"Who are those guys?" asked Narred and Darren at the same time.
"Well we are the reinforcements," replied Blaze.
"Blaze!" cried Hiro.
"Hiro?" said Blaze. "What are you doing here?"
Rose stood between the two, "Enough already! We have a job you know. We have to break them out."
"Glad to see your okay Rose," said Soul.
"Okay," said Rose with a red face.
The others around them were just staring at the two love birds.
"We should get going," suggested Blaze.
The group agreed with him and headed out. They were almost at the exit until an Alakazam popped out.
"No one escapes from Alakatraz!" screamed the Alakazam. "Not with Moldybutt on the job!"
The group just stood there staring at him. Then they started to laugh.
"Dude," laughed Darren. "Even I know that is a dumb name. And that's coming from me!"
"No one humililates me and gets away with it!" shouted Moldybutt. "Guards attack them!"
A bunch of other Pokemon appeared in front of Moldybutt. They were holding impressive and dangerous weapons.
"We are screwed!" shouted the Kecleon.
The eevee then bit the Kecleon's hand, "Calm down Reyn! We are going to be okay! Besides, you can turn invisible."
"I think he gets the point Maya," said Blaze.
"Wait Maya and Reyn!" screamed Soul.
"Enough chatting they are coming!" shouted 80-D.
The guards were getting closer to them. Soul was trying to think of a plan. He then had one.
"80-D!" shouted Soul. "Use Hyper Beam on the ceiling!"
"Okay then," replied 80-D. "Hyper Beam!"
An orb of energy filled 80-D mouth. It then turned into a beam that shot the ceiling. The ceiling then collapsed . It seperated them from the guards, but seperated their group into two.
"Damn it!" shouted Blaze. "What do we do now?"
"I know!" said Hiro. "Narred meet us at the Professor's house!"
"Okay then!" replied Narred.
"Oh yea," said Blaze. "Adam I got something to tell you!"
"What is it Blaze?" asked Adam.
"I want you to take of Maya for me for now!" replied Blaze. Maya's face was blushing like there was no tomorrow. "And that you are the new leader of Dragonfire!"
"What!" screamed Adam. "You...Huh..Mario..I..Ug..Pudding...What!"
"Now you have to make the decisions for Dragonfire," said Blaze. "It's your choice if you want to go to the meeting place or not."
"Hurry up Blaze we have to go!" shouted Soul.
Soul, Blaze, Hiro, Rose, Jason, and Reyn ran through a hole in the wall Jason made. The other group consisted of Adam, 80-D, Hak, Snow, Narred, Darren, Horizon, Maya, and the Aipom.
"Alright then," said 80-D. "Get us out of here Arie."
The Aipom nodded and they teleported away. The only ones left on the Prison were the guards and Moldybutt.
"Damn it!" screamed Moldybutt. "Ring Master is going to have my butt."
A dark figure in a cloak appeared in alley. It looked like it was waiting for someone. After a while a Cacturne appeared.
"Hello my old friend," said the cloaked figure. "I here that you go by the name of Thorn Master now."
"Well that is correct Samuel," replied Thorn Master.
"Wow," laughed Samuel. "I haven't called that in a long time, Radolf."
"Well I thought you had disappeared a while back," said Radolf. "Everyone had wondered where you went. Especially your kids."
"You're one to talk Radolf!" shouted Samuel. "You abandoned your own daughter from what I heard."
"What ever," said Radolf. "Take off that cloak already Samuel!"
Samuel did as his friend said. He took off his cloak to reveal his true self. He was a Darkrai. Darkrai was one of the forgotten Pokemon in The Game.
"I don't want Soul or Sara to see me like this," said Samuel.
"I wonder where they are at?" said Blaze in a sad tone. He walks to the school slowly. "Rose has been absent for a while."
As Blaze gets closer to the school a shadow appears behind him. It is a shadow of a man. The man walks closer to Blaze and puts his hand on his shoulder.
Blaze turns around and goes into a fighting stance, "Who are you?!"
"Well hello Blaze," greeted the man. "You may know me as 80-D, but you shouldn't call me that in the open. Call Argorok for now."
"80-D!?" shouted Blaze. "I mean Argorok. What are you doing here?"
"Didn't I tell you I would be stopping by," replied Argorok. "Well here I am."
"You idiot!" shouted Blaze. "You were supposed to be here days ago! Soul, Adam, and Jason are still missing! Rose won't even come to school now!"
The bell is heard from the school. Blaze doesn't move an inch at the sound.
"You should head to class already k..." insisted Argorok.
Blaze punched 80-D in the face. He was angry at him. 80-D' right eye was all bruised up from Blaze's punch. Blaze the turned and walked to the school. He didn't care anymore that he was going to be late. He finally made it to his class and opened the door.
"Ah Blaze you're here," greeted Mr. Nishimura. "Just take your seat. Nothing happened yet."
Blaze walked to his seat lost in his thought. He looked at his classmates. Including him only about four remained. He then saw that Rose came to school. The others in the class were Maya and this kid reading a book. After a couple hours of nothing the bell finally rings. Maya walks up to Blaze with Rose behind her.
"Hey Blaze," greeted Maya. "We are going to eat lunch on the roof. Want to come with us?" She then turned to the kid with the book. "You can come too."
Blaze walks to the door, "Come on slow pokes I don't have all day."
Maya and Rose run to Blaze and they go to the roof.
"Wait for me guys!" shouted the kid.
The sound of screams were echoed through out the building. Through a small crack in a wall a light could be seen. This light wasn't heart-warming or bright. It was dark as the heart of those in this Prison. This Prison was the most ruthless and savaging of them all. The name of the Prison was Alakatraz.
"I heard that we have some new arrivals," said Prisoner 1.
"New people!" screamed Prisoner 2. "Oh boy! I hope they like to play!"
"You better not do anything to scare them you two!" shouted Prisoner 3.
As the other Prisoners were talking three new Prisoners were walking to their new homes. The Prisoners were none other then Soul, Adam, and Jason. Since Soul's right arm has been burnt off he doesn't have a right arm anymore. Then they finally arrived in their new home. Besides them there was another Pokemon. The Pokemon was a Tentacool. I am not sure how, but he was surviving out of water and using his tentacles to walk.
"This is your new home," said the Guard. He pushes the three of them into the cell and locks it. "Welcome to Alakatraz."
Soul was in a lot of pain. He lost a lot of blood before. Adam helped him get up and placed him on a bed.
"Welcome to cell block 436," greeted the Tentacool. "My name is Hak, but you can call me Roy since we are going to be cellmates."
"My name is Jason," replied Jason. He got on his bunk and lay down on it. "The Pichu is Soul and the Charmander is Charquil. What are you in for?"
"Well it's a long story," said Hak. "and if I told you I would have to kill you!"
Adam gulps out loud, "Well when is lunch Roy?"
A loud screeching noise echoed through out the Prison.
"It is now Lunch time," said Hak.
Soul jumps out of the bed when he hears its lunch time. Once the cell opens he runs to the cafeteria at an extreme speed.
"What is wrong with that kid?" asked the guard.
"I would like to know that too," sighed Adam.
When they finally arrived at the cafeteria Soul was sitting by himself with a huge stack of empty plates. The other Prisoners were just staring at him. After the three cellmates got their food they sat by Soul.
"How is he still small even though he eats so much?" asked Adam.
"One of the world's biggest," said Jason. "I mean smallest mysteries."
After a couple minutes Soul was finally stuffed. He was about to get his 23rd serving, but four Pokemon joined them. The Pokemon in the front was a scizor. The Pokemon right next to it was a wynaut. Behind them were a Trapinch and a Sneasel.
"Great," sighed Hak. "It's you guys."
"Howdy Roy," greeted the Wynaut. "You got any pudding?"
The Scizor picked up the Wynaut, "Darren you have to stop doing that."
"But Narred."
Hak faces Soul, Adam, and Jason, "I think I should introduce them." He points at the group in front of them. "The Scizor is Narred and the Wynaut is Darren. Believe it or not thet are the same person."
"Is that even possible?" asked Adam.
"Split personality," replied Darren. He looks at Jason. "Hello Jason."
"No!" shouted Jason. "It was you!"
"You guys know each other," said Adam.
"Wait I think this guy goes to our school," stated Soul. "I think this is the crazy guy that follows Jason around."
"Okay?" said Hak. "Well getting back to me. The Trapinch is Horizon..."
"But you can call me Doug!" interrupted Horizon.
"And the Sneasel is Snow," said Hak. He looks at the group with a confused look. "Wasn't there another one of you guys? Oh yea! The Bidoof."
"Oh you mean him," replied Darren.
Darren started to poke Jason. After a while Jason got irritated and threw a brick at Darren's face.
"Brick'd!" shouted Narred. "If you mean Hiro he is in the cell doing something."
Soul literally spit out all of his pudding on Jason's face.
"Is this karma or something," sighed Jason.
"Did you say Hiro?!" asked Soul.
"Yea I know Hiro," replied Narred. "He is my cellmate."
"So your telling me that Hiro is in Alakatraz!"
"Yes we are," said Snow. "We don't know why, but as soon as all of us started some guys kidnapped us and we awakened in this place."
"I knew it," said Jason. He was wiping off all of the pudding on him. "So the Organization is behind this."
"He is correct," agreed Adam. "We have seen face to face what they can do. Look what they did to Soul's arm.
Soul shows them his arm. When they look at it they looked freaked out. Darren even threw up on Jason.
"This just isn't my day," sighed Jason. Jason threw another brick at Darren.
"I think Hiro could fix it," suggested Horizon. "He is good with building and repairing things."
"Then it's decided," said Soul. He stood up and walked to Snow and Horizon. "Take us to Hiro!"
"By us you mean," said Darren.
"He means all of us!" shouted Narred.
The group of eight walked back to Narred's cell. When they arrived the saw a Bidoof. The Bidoof was building something.
"He always gets caught up in his inventions," whispered Horizon.
"Hey Hiro!" shouted Darren. "Some people want a Pickle." Narred punched him in the head. "I mean they want to meet you." He then passes out.
The Bidoof gets up off the floor and turns around. He looks at the group. He stares at Soul with and odd expression on his face.
"Long time no see Hiro," greeted Soul.
"Soul!" cried Hiro. He tackled Soul to the ground. He was happy to see one of his old friends. Then he got off of Soul. "What are you doing here!?"
"Well we got captured by the Organization," replied Adam.
"They ambushed us and it became a full in Battle Royal," said Jason. "Well enough with the talk. We need you to repair Soul's arm."
Soul shows Hiro his "arm." Hiro jumps back when he sees what happened. He immediately jumps back to his work and starts to build something. After 10 minutes he was still working.
"And that's how I met this Dumbass," sighed Jason while pointing at Darren.
"So you really threw a brick at him," said Hak. "In real life?"
"He did," replied Narred. "Since I am technically Darren it hurt. It hurt a lot."
"Well when I first went Ridgeway I got ambushed by a bunch of Gang members," said Soul with a smirk. "Then Blaze came along and we beat them to a pulp."
"So you and Blaze actually defeated a gang" said Adam. "Well I live nearby your school so maybe I could meet some of you guys."
"It's finished!" screamed Hiro. He jumped up and down with excitement.
When he screamed everyone didn't expect it and one of them screamed. They all stared at each other and laughed. After the commotion Hiro attached the arm to Soul. Soul screamed a little because of the pain.
"Well their it is," said Hiro. "It still needs a few modifications, but I am not sure how I am going to do it."
"It should be about the time when they arrive," said Jason.
"Right as usual Jason," agreed Adam.
"I forgot about them," said Soul.
"Who?!" shouted the others.
"Our allies," replied Jason. "The Rebillion is coming to save us. There might even be a mass breakout."
Hak looked confused, "A mass bre.."
A loud explosion interrupted Hak. Sirens and screams were heard after the explosion. Prisoners were escaping and hell was breaking loose.
"What in the world was that?" asked Hak.
"Our escape!" shouted Soul. "You know what to do Jason."
Jason nodded at Soul. His leaf blades started to glow and he sliced the bars of the cell, but it failed.
"It didn't work!" screamed Jason. Smoke started to fill up the Prison.
"Maybe this will," said a voice. The smoke was covering his whole body. The only thing visible was the keys in his hand. He unlocked the doors to the cell.
As Soul walked out of the Prison he stood in front of the figure, "Who are you?"
"Sorry about that," said the figure. "80-D do your thing."
Soul, Adam, and Jason knew who it was now. The smoke blew away and a couple of Pokemon wee standing in front of them. Besides Blaze, Rose, and 80-D a few other Pokemon were there. An Aipom, eevee, and a Kecleon were with them.
"Who are those guys?" asked Narred and Darren at the same time.
"Well we are the reinforcements," replied Blaze.
"Blaze!" cried Hiro.
"Hiro?" said Blaze. "What are you doing here?"
Rose stood between the two, "Enough already! We have a job you know. We have to break them out."
"Glad to see your okay Rose," said Soul.
"Okay," said Rose with a red face.
The others around them were just staring at the two love birds.
"We should get going," suggested Blaze.
The group agreed with him and headed out. They were almost at the exit until an Alakazam popped out.
"No one escapes from Alakatraz!" screamed the Alakazam. "Not with Moldybutt on the job!"
The group just stood there staring at him. Then they started to laugh.
"Dude," laughed Darren. "Even I know that is a dumb name. And that's coming from me!"
"No one humililates me and gets away with it!" shouted Moldybutt. "Guards attack them!"
A bunch of other Pokemon appeared in front of Moldybutt. They were holding impressive and dangerous weapons.
"We are screwed!" shouted the Kecleon.
The eevee then bit the Kecleon's hand, "Calm down Reyn! We are going to be okay! Besides, you can turn invisible."
"I think he gets the point Maya," said Blaze.
"Wait Maya and Reyn!" screamed Soul.
"Enough chatting they are coming!" shouted 80-D.
The guards were getting closer to them. Soul was trying to think of a plan. He then had one.
"80-D!" shouted Soul. "Use Hyper Beam on the ceiling!"
"Okay then," replied 80-D. "Hyper Beam!"
An orb of energy filled 80-D mouth. It then turned into a beam that shot the ceiling. The ceiling then collapsed . It seperated them from the guards, but seperated their group into two.
"Damn it!" shouted Blaze. "What do we do now?"
"I know!" said Hiro. "Narred meet us at the Professor's house!"
"Okay then!" replied Narred.
"Oh yea," said Blaze. "Adam I got something to tell you!"
"What is it Blaze?" asked Adam.
"I want you to take of Maya for me for now!" replied Blaze. Maya's face was blushing like there was no tomorrow. "And that you are the new leader of Dragonfire!"
"What!" screamed Adam. "You...Huh..Mario..I..Ug..Pudding...What!"
"Now you have to make the decisions for Dragonfire," said Blaze. "It's your choice if you want to go to the meeting place or not."
"Hurry up Blaze we have to go!" shouted Soul.
Soul, Blaze, Hiro, Rose, Jason, and Reyn ran through a hole in the wall Jason made. The other group consisted of Adam, 80-D, Hak, Snow, Narred, Darren, Horizon, Maya, and the Aipom.
"Alright then," said 80-D. "Get us out of here Arie."
The Aipom nodded and they teleported away. The only ones left on the Prison were the guards and Moldybutt.
"Damn it!" screamed Moldybutt. "Ring Master is going to have my butt."
A dark figure in a cloak appeared in alley. It looked like it was waiting for someone. After a while a Cacturne appeared.
"Hello my old friend," said the cloaked figure. "I here that you go by the name of Thorn Master now."
"Well that is correct Samuel," replied Thorn Master.
"Wow," laughed Samuel. "I haven't called that in a long time, Radolf."
"Well I thought you had disappeared a while back," said Radolf. "Everyone had wondered where you went. Especially your kids."
"You're one to talk Radolf!" shouted Samuel. "You abandoned your own daughter from what I heard."
"What ever," said Radolf. "Take off that cloak already Samuel!"
Samuel did as his friend said. He took off his cloak to reveal his true self. He was a Darkrai. Darkrai was one of the forgotten Pokemon in The Game.
"I don't want Soul or Sara to see me like this," said Samuel.
The next upcoming chapter will be mostly FLASHBACKS representing what happened before The Game. Also if any of you have your own team or will own your own team you could start a side-story, but you have to confirm with me first. You can make your own teammates, but Charquil can't because his team is already set. XD
Here is teams so far
Spoiler:
Charquil-Dragonfire
Hak-Team Venomous Infections
Hak-Team Venomous Infections
16-07-2010, 12:15 AM
"What!" screamed Adam. "You...Huh..Mario..I..Ug..Pudding...What!"
Woot! Dragonfire is MINE! >=D
Good job, ThatFallingGuy, you may now continue your story While I steal Dragonfire and leave, thank you very much.
(edit) Niu! I realized I have to wait another chapter! I'm still stuck with 80-D and a few others I don't want DX
Woot! Dragonfire is MINE! >=D
Good job, ThatFallingGuy, you may now continue your story While I steal Dragonfire and leave, thank you very much.
(edit) Niu! I realized I have to wait another chapter! I'm still stuck with 80-D and a few others I don't want DX