09-06-2010, 09:18 PM
This was originally going to be a manga, but I don't have the time to do that at the moment. So here it is as a story.
Warning the whole story contains violence and adult themes, please do not read if you are easily offended.
Prologue P1
C+C appreciated, I have the story pretty much mapped out but I would still like feedback. Thanks.
Warning the whole story contains violence and adult themes, please do not read if you are easily offended.
Prologue P1
Spoiler:
Thunder. Thunder roared and lightning tore through the blackness of the night sky. It was a frightening night, nobody dared to leave their homes. At times like this families stayed inside, huddled around the warmth of the fire. Everyone was waiting for this brutal attack to end. Everyone except one man.
A shaded figure creeped through the alleys and passages, nobody would see him with the natural cover he was provided with. The man was very tall, he must have been bordering seven foot if not taller, but even with his size he still managed to duck and swerve swiftly around obstacles without a sound.
The man stopped next to a tall wooden fence which was situated around the local research center, it was rumoured that rare pokemon were being kept inside, pokemon so rare that only a handful of humans knew of their existance.
There was a flash of white light.
There was now another stood next to the man. But it wasn't human, it had almost bug-like qualities. This was a slim creature with large wings and long slender arms, but without hands, it instead had long, sharp, deadly scythes that lit up when lightening struck. This was definately a pokemon, but a pokemon like no other, a pokemon with a desire for power and a lust for blood. It was pure evil. The man muttered something to the monster and immediately it hopped over the fence and was crouched on the roof of the research center within the blink of an eye. The roof tiles were wet and slippery, but this creature had an extraordinary sense of balance, not slipping or tripping once even at the immense speed it moved. Then the monster disappeared, almost like it had dropped through a hole in the research center, almost like it was breaking in.
The bug-like monster had indeed broken into the research center and upon entering, it was faced with two men dressed in a blue uniform that carried automatic rifles. Without warning and without being provoked the creature impaled one of the men with its scythe, it left it within the man while he slashed at the other cutting a large gash accross his chest. After, the bug removed its scythe from the man's body and licked the blood tenderly, this creature was a savage. It stood there, without a care, licking its scythes while one of the men still gasps for air, coughing up his own blood and flooding the floor with fluid from the gash in his chest. But the creature just watched, torturing the man, he would die eventually...
A shaded figure creeped through the alleys and passages, nobody would see him with the natural cover he was provided with. The man was very tall, he must have been bordering seven foot if not taller, but even with his size he still managed to duck and swerve swiftly around obstacles without a sound.
The man stopped next to a tall wooden fence which was situated around the local research center, it was rumoured that rare pokemon were being kept inside, pokemon so rare that only a handful of humans knew of their existance.
There was a flash of white light.
There was now another stood next to the man. But it wasn't human, it had almost bug-like qualities. This was a slim creature with large wings and long slender arms, but without hands, it instead had long, sharp, deadly scythes that lit up when lightening struck. This was definately a pokemon, but a pokemon like no other, a pokemon with a desire for power and a lust for blood. It was pure evil. The man muttered something to the monster and immediately it hopped over the fence and was crouched on the roof of the research center within the blink of an eye. The roof tiles were wet and slippery, but this creature had an extraordinary sense of balance, not slipping or tripping once even at the immense speed it moved. Then the monster disappeared, almost like it had dropped through a hole in the research center, almost like it was breaking in.
The bug-like monster had indeed broken into the research center and upon entering, it was faced with two men dressed in a blue uniform that carried automatic rifles. Without warning and without being provoked the creature impaled one of the men with its scythe, it left it within the man while he slashed at the other cutting a large gash accross his chest. After, the bug removed its scythe from the man's body and licked the blood tenderly, this creature was a savage. It stood there, without a care, licking its scythes while one of the men still gasps for air, coughing up his own blood and flooding the floor with fluid from the gash in his chest. But the creature just watched, torturing the man, he would die eventually...
C+C appreciated, I have the story pretty much mapped out but I would still like feedback. Thanks.